Border Patrol : Occupessatuxet Cove
Contamination does not happen in a straight line. Sometimes, especially in the event of Occupessatuxet Cove, pollutants can seep in from several angles. Though effective, often times treatment of water happens at point locations.
Wildlife also requires a faceted buffer strategy in order to thrive. Birds have a history of utilizing the cove and its wetlands as it is a convenient node in the Atlantic Flyway on both the north and south routes, being inland but still near the coast. The cove's important role is threatened by the surrounding human traffic (planes, cars, trains, boats, etc.) and the stress it projects onto the wildlife.
Occupessatuxet Cove has long felt the presence of humans; our occupation of this region will not likely cease. In order to secure its survival as an important hub for waterfowl and drainage of runoff to the sea, a border must be instated. This border however, will be soft: it will allow for viewing of the cove, and slowly filter out pollutants from contributing ponds. The key for its success is in part to educate people through interaction of the process it takes to undo harsh effects of our presence while allowing viewing of the product of this filter: the birds and thriving wetland.
Comments
Dana,
The imagery is beautiful and haunting. The layout of the spread is elegant and well balanced. You definitely have a graphic eye.
The first line of text, "Contamination does not happen in a straight line", is beautiful and haunting and affords many interpretations. You could use it as a defining metaphor and structure your argument around it.
Unfortunately the remainder of the text is vague and poorly constructed. Some of you statements and comments just don't hold water. For example, you mention a wetland deprived from physical needs and human interaction. I understand the physical needs, but what wetland needs human interaction?
Also, you mention the concept of wall, and yet I see a path on the ground. Has the wall become metaphorical?
Work on complete concepts in your writing. Remember, we're writing for the layperson. I'm excited for the direction of the project.
Posted by: Jonathan Harris | October 31, 2006 2:50 AM